I stand in the grocery aisle And see the flavors go on for a mile
I can't help but stare
I want them all I declare
My mothers voice demands, "Absolutely not"
I feel my temper getting hot
Isn't it normal to love candy when you're a teen
Let me have just one JELLY BEAN
Nice rhyming, like how the background of your blog goes with the poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how you said "And see the flavors go on for a mile." It really made me imagine a jelly bean store because they have so many flavors that seem to go on forever. All in all, I really enjoyed reading your poem-good job!
ReplyDeleteI like your rhyme scheme, and how you are specific, like rather than "lots of flavors" you said "all the flavors go on for a mile."
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
One thing for next time is when you declare you want them all; you need to have parenthesis on what you are saying..
I really loved how you rhymed the two lines. You were very specific and I can visualize you standing in the grocery store. I like jelly beans too. Amazing job!
ReplyDeleteI like you're blog a lot. It's very you. I really like how you put some fun extras throughout the blog.
You just put a smile on my face, I love jelly beans!!! Poems are hard to make it sound like you, and you did a fantastic job!
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